Are you caught in the trap?

Question

Another older poem, close to my heart

Mousetrap

It’s too late for you now

Do you hear that?

It’s the snap of the metal

Of the mousetrap

You’re stuck in it now

Can you feel that?

The pain is digging deep

From the mouse trap

Look around, all around

Can you see that?

Everyone left you behind

In the mousetrap

Such a pathetic situation

Can you taste that?

Bitterness self-inflicted

In the mousetrap

Time has passed you by

Can you smell that?

The scent of your dying flesh

In the mousetrap

Escape from this h**l

Do you think that?

Forever you will stay

In your mousetrap

Copyright 2008

Answer 1

Raw, graphic and in your face.  Obviously to someone who was once close.  Probably cathartic for you. To me though, I would suggest more subtlety in development, but that is just me.  

Answer 2

This could be speaking to someone else, but I see it as the first steps

towards self knowlege as well. The realization that we must evolve and grow or face the consequenses.  This is a very interesting poem, and thanks for posting it.

Answer 3

This poem starts out with tremendous impact and then becomes more philosophical...I love it.I love the way the questions in the second line of each stanza use all of the senses.  It gives your poem such depth. I also love how this works on more than one level, depending on whether you are talking to a specific person, or yourself or whether the reader is intended to ask these questions personally. Thank you.  

Answer 4

This poem made me think of my ex-husband. He has a drug habit, so to me he is this mouse in the mousetrap, smelling his own rotten flesh; and guess what, I don`t feel sorry for him.

He could just stay in his mouse trap because I am tired of trying to save him!

Thanks for sharing!

Answer 5

"Hi!",

"PERFECTO!" : )

Please don't alter this one. It was written  great. I LOVED IT!.

I know it's horrible but I just can't wipe the smile of my face. It actually made me laugh!

LOVED IT, LOVED IT, LOVED IT!!!!!!!!

WELL DONE!

Cheers : )

Answer 6

that's kinda raunchy if you do the right thing with it