Awesome poem... tell me any suggestions or what I should do to improve it...?

Question

I’m falling down to the ground

Someone take this pain and turn it around

Cause im going under.

Down I fall

6 feet under tell it’s done

Build me up and tear me down

Raise this memory from the ground

I saw this light from above

Now I know it’s a message from above

My heart is beating and my hands are shaking

Around the cornor I turn for advice

Nothing to see, the light is diming inside me

It was worth a memory, and a lesson to be learned.

The adventure was taken to the ground so

6 feet under I lay under ground

Answer 1

i'm not "feeling" it.

Answer 2

i loved it its like what i write

can you read and comment on my poems

Answer 3

Is this a joke?

The poem's about as "awesome" as a dead gerbil.

A suggestion?

Delete it and pretend it never happened.

Answer 4

i feel nothing towards it