Back To Bug You All With My Incompetent Literature. Mind Critiques?

Question

I'm only 14 and not an English speaker - not to tell you to be understanding, but I would love any advice, criticism, etc.

http://falathiel.deviantart.com/art/Fleeing-89894505

http://falathiel.deviantart.com/art/I-m-Not-Ready-89545230

http://falathiel.deviantart.com/art/24-quot-The-Exclamation-Mark-quot-88987949

http://falathiel.deviantart.com/art/Throes-Of-Life-87091785

http://falathiel.deviantart.com/art/13-Un-Petite-Poeme-En-Prose-88468528 (Prose poetry)

http://falathiel.deviantart.com/art/Chasing-Demons-90112300 (Solo stage script)

Thank you all deeply in advance. :) You can just choose one and read it, if you care to read but don't have enough time or don't want to read all of them. Tell me your opinions!

Answer 1

You are kind of going a tiny bit overboard on details. Details are good, but overloading and adding unnecessary ones will bore the reader

Answer 2

just be your self be g*y if u have 2