CRITIQUE MY POEM "Wheelchair"?

Question

Wheelchair

The wheelchair sits alone for now

His duty is complete.

He’s helped a soul, and now will wait

Till someone takes a seat.

Perhaps a child, immature

Will role around for fun.

Or someone old, who knows each breath

Might be their final one.

A mother soon to be, who’s child

Longs to see the light;

Or just a teenage boy who lost

All hope late in the night.

The wheelchair helps with no resent,

But always wonders why

The patients leave and never give

A thank you, or goodbye.

Answer 1

its great!! really there is no way i could do that. its kind of sad though you should write another one and spunk it up a bit!!!

Answer 2

Hey one minor point: Watch your pronouns.

L2: Change His to Its

L3: Change He's to It's

You are personifying just fine without giving the wheelchair a gender.

Answer 3

What astonishes me is the choice of subject matter. As soon as I saw the title I knew it was going to be good. Anyone whose imagination is lively enough, and bizarre enough, to write a poem about a wheelchair, will be able to do it justice. If you take requests, can you do one about a stethoscope?

Answer 4

very good, however you spelled roll wrong and its a bit awkward how you changed the rhmye scheme in stanza three

Answer 5

Great personification of a chair - nice fresh viewpoint - too bad that useful objects - do not get "thanked" more often - we would surely be at a loss without them.  Suggestion: review your meter - it seems somewhat strained ♥

Answer 6

its really nice, i personally never forget to thank mine :)