Calling all people interested in poetry, have a look at this poem, i have never gotten any real opinion?

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No title:I wrote this when I was 16 when my family wouldnt believe i wrote some of my other poems, I wrote it in front of them in 10/15 mins.

All that has happened,

Is there to be mourned.

Attrocities and disasters bring forth terrible thoughts;

Of hatred and revenge,

They are rumbling to the crust,

The plates they are shaking,

They're grinding more each day,

Underneath the magma is melting away,

Boiling more with each tick,

Growing hotter so quick,

And why it is there, it makes people sick!

Some day it wil explode,

And the world will be cold,

But fore now its locked up,

And oppressed by deteste,

All of the enemies,

They put it to the test,

They loathe at its faith,

And try to keep locked the gate,

Yes the road is not straight,

But the hot stuff will rise,

It will generate steam like a savourous team...of colefillers trapped in a ship moving fast,

This poem I declare,

the ending will last,

Until the magma has rose,

And the earthquake is cast

Answer 1

It's good, and it's sort of a time capsule because your words reveal your age at this time:)  It has a nice flow, but is a bit choppy in some areas - however, not choppy enough to take a reader's attention away from the message of the poem.  I like the way that it's sort of a mixture of traditional and slam-style poetry - it's traditional in that it uses language that serves as food for thought, but slam-style at the same time in that it has short, rhyming, intense lines.  I like it - it shows insight.

If you're still interested in titling it here are a couple of suggestions:

1) "Tumultuous Times"

2) "A Hastening to the Death"