Can I have your thoughts on this poem?

Question

Aurora Borealis

Lady Aurora, beauty personified,

dancing in the night skies;

Queen of the heavens

in swishing skirts of light

twirling amongst the stars.

How could you be so far

from this adoring heart,

the eyes you inspire?

You paint the darkness

between me

and the worlds beyond;

you touch my soul with

a glorious glimpse

of the eternal power

in that great somewhere

where you are.

I am small indeed,

but when you dance

I am not afraid;

I am no longer alone.

Answer 1

It does not move me as much as your poetry usually does.

could be I am on an off day

It is lovely none the less, but I think you should give it a little bit more essence to make it reach out if you would...

You write beautifully and you can only make it better with your own instinct.

Answer 2

Lovely view of the wonders of the night sky.

Answer 3

(i would get rid of in)swishing skirts of light

(get rid of the)of  eternal power

but everything else looks good.i really like it. keep writing!!

Answer 4

the subject is about a free flowing woman. i can tell.

it grosses me out. but i like the way it is written. the feeling of grossness you instill in my body when i read it tells me that you have done the greatest description known to the human earth. thank you goodnight

Answer 5

It's a decent free form poem. The speed of the poem could be worked on though. It slows down a bit much in the middle and your idea changes somewhat abruptly in the last 4 lines.

Answer 6

It's sweet and increases my desire to see this wonder of nature... But it's also a little cheap in some predictable way. Perhaps that's cause I didn't have the pleasure yet getting overwhelmed by Lady Aurora:) Since it does strengthen my feelings about her, I like it, a lot.

I'm not at all in the position to judge a poem tho.

But since you asked for our thoughts... These are mine. I hope it helps & I wish ye good inspiration for more writings.