Can anyone help me check and fix my essay?

Question

Eastern Textile strives for providing the best products to our customers in more innovative and reliable ways that are superior to our competitors over the past 30 years. Based on our continued research and development and customer-oriented service, we can ensure all of our customers of a continued high standard services. Our superior quality control and effective delivery have consolidated our role as a market leader in this field, with the full support and trust of all our customer. Our mission is to be recognized as a benchmark of excellence in the fabric industry.

Answer 1

Noone is going to read that. I read the first line and then bla bla.

What you write depends on what it goes on or is used for.

Also quit saying you want to be or are trying to be. You are the best and you know it here is why. Try that approach.

"Eastern Textile over the last 30 years has become the envy of the textile industry.

Our innovation, research, and reliability along with our guaranteed high standard service has made us the benchmark of excellence. "

Last line should be your moto - like UPS - let brown work for you.

Short in three pieces and then people will read it.

Answer 2

Eastern Textile strives to provide the best products to our customers in more innovative and reliable ways, superior to our competitors over the past 30 years. Based on our continued research, development and customer-oriented service, we can ensure all of our customers of continuous high standard services. Our superior quality control and effective delivery have consolidated our role as a market leader in this field, with the full support and trust of all our customers. Our mission is to be recognized as a benchmark of excellence in the fabric industry.

Answer 3

Hi,

I have a lot of experience marketing small companies online (I have 3 companies).  One of the best ways is to sign up at business directories and protals.  These are basically listings of businesses (simliar to the phone book).  The advantage is that these portals usually get a lot of traffic and they're ranked high on Google because of all the quality links they contain.

My favorite portal is called Directory Exclusive.  I signed up a few weeks ago because they're giving a away a free business card holder when a person enter's their company info.  I received it in the mail 3 days ago =)

I don't know if they still have that promotion, but you can try to get the free card holder here:

http://www.best-directory.info

Good Luck

Answer 4

you got some real long sentences, otherwise lookin good.

and for godsake dont check my spelling

Answer 5

Knowitall is right. You are just patting yourselves on the back, and using the same tired verbiage we have all read time and time again.

Keep it short and to the point. "Get in and get out," as they say.

A tagline or positioning line would definitely help you. Something like, "Eastern Textile - The fabric of the textile trade."

Good luck.

Answer 6

For the past 30 years, Eastern Textile has strived to provide the best products to our customers, in more innovative, reliable and superior ways  than our competitors.