Can anyone help me with this poem and rate it?

Question

I started with this but no matter what I try I just can't think of a way to change it here it is:

Droplets falling from the sky

From clouds up so high

Down the sky path

And into the bath

Answer 1

She is a lost cause mate...

Answer 2

it sounds like you copied twinkle twinkle little star

Answer 3

I understand where you're going with this, but I think it's a little too basic.

Readers can tell that you're trying too hard to make it rhyme. How about you change it so Lines 1 and 3 don't rhyme, but Lines 2 and 4 do? This way, you are left with more choices, and you don't get stuck from trying to find rhyming words.

This is my example:

Droplets of pure rain dancing down

From heavenly clouds resting in the sky

Showering the earth with a treasure so special

Falling to the ground where the puddles lie

How about that?

Good luck. =D