Can someone correct this short essay for me? its for an art scholarship PLZ dont have a teacher to correct it!

Question

the question was ( "What has influenced your decision to pursue a career in design?" )

Designs are what surrounds us all and influences our daily lives. It is a matter of expressing your creativity and emotions into something beautiful. It can share someone else's idea and connect with them. It expresses someone own style and personality through colors and patterns and how we betray ourselves to others.

Design has influenced me all my life. I can send out a message to viewers without words because my creativity speaks for itself. Having a career in the design business means that there is no limit to your passion of colors, patterns and your artistic vision. You share this vision to people and it is a joyous experience because many conquer with your vision. You can be influence by anything in the world and make that influence into your own style.

Fashion design has influenced me since I was 12 years old. I have utilized many colors through many art classes and captures the wonderful ideas in the world. I turn the things we see in our daily lives into something wearable. I have chosen my path to be a fashion designer because I think that we should all work our hardest into something that we enjoy and have a passion for. Also, that we can dedicate our time and effort into something magnificent and show the world what you are made for. Creating new designs and transforming it into life is a feeling of accomplishment that you want to share with the world and a dream come true for my supporters and for me.

Answer 1

how we betray ourselves - portray ourselves

share this vision to people - with people

and make that influence into - turn/spin  that influence

and captures the - captured

my path to be a fashion designer - fashion designing

all work our hardest into something - for something that

Also, that we can dedicate our time and effort into something magnificent and show the world what you are made for.- rewrite this thought. we becomes you.

and a dream come true for my supporters and for me. - rewrite. needs a powerful ending.