Can someone critique/help me out with this poem?

Question

You opened the door

Handed me a stone rose

Said it was woven by each remnant

By the particles of your memories

It glistened under the marrow of grief

The fire of ectacy's rapture

Emanating the reflection of every silver knight

You said it was all you had

But you didn't want it any more

So I let it crumble to ashen snow

And went with you

Answer 1

The images you create are beautiful, I love them!  

The poem doesn't flow as well as it could, you might want to make an effort to put more rhythm into it, meter.  I think many people assume that a poem is either strictly structured or completely loose, but great poems come with both. One must learn to appreciate the beauty of structure in a poem.

You might want to consider making it present tense.  "You open the door / hand me a stone rose..."

In the end of the first stanza and the beginning of the second it gets a little wordy.  It's great to use expressive and specific words but be careful not to over do it.  Poems are supposed to be the most stripped down, ideally constructed and concise expression.  

You say a lot of things about the rose in a short time, I think making it a little word-overwhelming.  You may want to extend the description, so it's more simple and flowing.

I think you did a great job creating the tone of the poem with certain words "rose," "stone," "remnant," "woven"

You might want to consider not using contractions, "didn't" -> "did not."  Would seem to fit the mood better.

I hope some of this makes sense...overall I really like it and think you should pursue poetry.  Don't forget to read the greats, you'll be amazed at how studying great poetry can improve your writing and thought processes.

Answer 2

You go about writing real poetry with what you have just done.  Just write.  Keep a journal and get to it.  Don't get bogged down with right way or wrong way.  Then start reading others.  See what kind of poetry you eventually what to write.  Don't get stuck in a mold.  Pick up an issue of the magazine "Poetry" and see what others are writing.   I like you poem, reread it and work on line 7.  Keep writing.