Can someone critique my introductory paragraph for All Quiet on the Western Front

Question

As said in the preface of All Quiet on the Western Front by Erich Remarque “I will try simply to tell of a generation of men who, even though they may have escaped shells, were destroyed by the war.” This generation is now known to many as the lost generation. The lost generation is the men who went straight from childhood to fighting in World War I, as young men. One of these young men is Paul Baumer. Paul Baumer is one of millions of persons who have been lured to join the war by national loyalty and glory for their country. Though Remarque defines Paul and his generation as the lost generation and many of the soldiers become lost emotionally and physically, a closer examination reveals that their loss is a result of their loyalty to the war, changing their lives forever.

Answer 1

I think this is very well written. The only changes I suggest are some quotations marks, which I added below. I don't know what your teacher expects, but you might also want to consider putting the title of the book in italics. Nice job!

As said in the preface of All Quiet on the Western Front by Erich Remarque “I will try simply to tell of a generation of men who, even though they may have escaped shells, were destroyed by the war.” This generation is now known to many as "the lost generation." The lost generation is the men who went straight from childhood to fighting in World War I, as young men. One of these young men is Paul Baumer. Paul Baumer is one of millions of persons who have been lured to join the war by national loyalty and glory for their country. Though Remarque defines Paul and his generation as the lost generation and many of the soldiers become "lost" emotionally and physically, a closer examination reveals that their loss is a result of their loyalty to the war, changing their lives forever.