Can someone help me on choosing which two ways to start off my story I am going to write?Please read details.?

Question

Ok, so before I start I want to explain that I am 15 years old. I have a story that i am going to start writing but I cant decide between 2 ways for it to go. It has overall the same plot to it but there are just two different ways that I can't choose for it to go. That's when I thought i would have people on yahoo answers tell me which way would be more interesting and why. I would really appreciate it if you explained your answer and, I wouldn't mind some input either. Lol I am always up for new ideas. I will show you the story plot first, but before i do, this story plot is based on if I write it based on way # 2.Anyways, first of all, here is the story plot:

The story is about sixteen year old Leslie who is suddenly abducted from her modern hometown by two boys. She is wisked to a strange Kingdom where she is held as a soon to be sacrfice for the current Queen. It seems she has a hidden power inside of her that the queen wants. The only way to get it, though, is to kill Leslie. Leslie's power isn't at it's peak, though, so Queen Lana demands that she be sent back to her hometown and watched until her powers are peaked. The two boys that Kidnapped her are sent to keep an eye on her and make sure nothing happens to her until then.. One of the boys,Vincent, who is seventeen, enrolls as a student in her school. He seems very aloof at first, but there is something about him that interests Leslie. The other boy, Owen, who is slightly older, also enrolls in her school. Leslie realizes that the two boys are more than just human. But when Vincent,who was sent to eventually end Leslie's life, becomes closer to her will he waver between following orders from the Queen or saving Leslie's life?

That is the basic plot to it. There is romance, of course. Lol I love romance. There is also action. Ok, so now that you know the main plot here are the two ways that the story can go.

Way#1

Leslie meets the two boys before she finds out who they are. She just thinks they're new students at the school. But, in reality, they are there to watch over her until the sacrifice. She is interested in Vincent and they end up having a mutual interest. When Leslie finds out that he is actually there to end her life what will she do? Will Vincent choose to save Leslie or obey his queen?

Ok, so that was pretty much how way # 1 would go.

Way#2

Leslie is kidnapped by the two boys and finds out that she will be a sacrifice once her powers are peaked. She is sent back home, and the boys follow her to watch over her. That is when they enroll in her school. Then, her and Vincent get close. Will he choose to obey his queen or save Leslie?

Those are the two ways. Basically, the only difference between them is that she knows who they are in one and she doesnt know who they are in the other. I just want to know what way you like better. Also, I'll take any ideas. Thanks!!!

Answer 1

How about this:  The two guys go to school with her and she's attracted to the one.  Then they kidnap her but it's too early.  So they're all sent back together.  They continue to watch her but now she knows who they are.  (There is potential for her to try to get away from them or make their lives h**l.)  Her fondness for the one is nearly destroyed by this discovery.  But there's still something about him.  When she is brought back to the evil queen, he turns on the queen--not because he's suddenly fallen for the girl but because he's always worked against the queen (kinda like a spy type).  This benefits you in a couple ways: you are able to paint Vincent in a bad light for awhile, you are able to shock the audience when the truth is revealed, and the reader will forgive his past actions because they now know that all along, he really was on her side.  And he can still totally fall for the girl.  Now we just know why he hasn't made a move (or much of one) until now.  Just a thought.  

Answer 2

I'd go with the 2nd Idea (I like your story idea, a little too teen romance for me but I have always loved the "enemies become lovers" thing so I'd be interested in reading it. I'd like you to post it on papertank.com when you've finished the first chapter-it's a nice site where authors give real constructive criticism that helps you improve-it'd make your story that much more better :D)

Anyway, I'd use number 2 because it provides you with a way to bring the characters together without having to deal with any secrecy between them. Like, the girl will know these two guys are watching her and waiting for her to reach her "peak" She'll likely try to convince her parents or some authority figure what happened and be ignored and eventually have to accept that she's alone in this or look the fool. It'll be interesting to watch as she gets used to the two of them hovering around her-at once guardians (b/c they can't let her be harmed before she's reached her peak, right?) and executioners.

Another thing to consider is the other Owen-will only Vincent be torn or will they both be. I hope they don't both end up liking Leslie (I got enough of the love triangle thing in the Twilight series thank you) Will Owen be another "evil" figure like the queen? Or will he be an older brother/advisor to Leslie and Vincent? Is the queen really evil? Why and what is the thing inside Leslie? Was she born with it? If the queen dies will something happen to Vincent and Owen's world?

This is a big story you've got on your hands-separate universes are not easy to create well. I'm not sure if your skill level is high enough to pull it off. But I want to read the beginning of this all the same.

Oh and please don't go with number one, I've read stories that use that plot device way too many times and whenever I see it I just think "ah, another good story gone down the drain." Maybe it's because I hate subterfuge. Something about keeping a big secret from someone you love and then expecting forgiveness after it comes out (in these types it usually comes out accidentally and just before the character means to tell their love interest) It just seems fake to me. I wouldn't forgive that kind of person.

Also, not to be rude to the other people on answers, but the thought of either of them being a double spy is just way overboard to me. You've already got a woman in love with a man sent to kill her when she's "ripe" and an alternate dimension; there's no need for yet another plot device. Too much of a good thing equals much pain in certain parts of the anatomy

Answer 3

definitely not #2 to me.

good luck :)

Answer 4

I like Way #1. Good luck!

Answer 5

hmmm. well, either way it seems like it would be a good story, and i would definately read it!!! it looks like it has the traits that i like most in books: fantasy, romance, and adventure.

if you went with way #1, it would be a bit more traditional, but that would be okay, because your story doesnt seem traditional at all, and the mystery would keep the reader going, anxious to know who the two boys are if you make a point of there being something weird or different about them from the start.

if u went with way #2, it would be more unique, but u lose some of that element of mystery. but that wouldnt be totally horid, because u would still have the mystery of what makes vincent tick, and what leslie's power is.

if i were u, i would go with way #1.

it sounds like an awesome story, and will u email it to me please!?

good luck! =3

edit:

alethia101 has some good points. she (apologies if ur a dude) has made me think, and i agree with her that the 2nd story would be very good.

im sure that whichever way u choose, the story will end up great, and i now agree with alethia101 that the 2nd way would make a superb story!

i also think that jen s has an interesting idea, and i think u should take bits and peices from hers, while still keeping the main idea of urs.

good luck!

ps. again, please email me chapters when u finish them, because i would love to read them, and critique them if u want.

Answer 6

I like way one better because that way she will get interested in Vincent first and then find out. That will make it more interesting because then she has a difficult decision to make. I think this will be a really good story.  GOOD LUCK:)

Answer 7

EDIT:

On second thought, I like the idea above. Go for way 3!