Can someone please grade this SAT Essay (1 out of 6)?

Question

Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.

Technological advances have freed society from tiresome labor, such as washing clothes by hand, hauling heavy loads, and walking long distances, and have given people increased access to information and entertainment. Yet, when given a choice, many people still resist using modern conveniences. There must be something to be gained from not using technology

Assignment:

Are there benefits to be gained from avoiding the use of modern technology, even when using it would make life easier? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

Answer 1

3 out of 6

Your essay doesn't have a thesis.  You give a lot of examples, which is good, but you don't go into detail about any of the examples.  Cite an example from a book, stick with it throughout the essay and develop it.