Here is the paragraph that needs to be proof read:
What do we have a right to expect from others?
Domestic partners mention how a serious relationship should take in order to maintain full commitment. When it comes down to getting serious they back down, both women and men. For example, the man, he makes the promise of always taking her out to eat, dance, take a walk to the park and buy her things. Sure there are times when there should be outgoings, fun and games but I believe a committed relationship is not just spending money on each other for material stuff. Both have to be fully grown, capable of taking care of their own bills and not depending on their parents, and probably already moved out. They should know what they want out of life and know what is best for their future. To know that they will not have to depend on each other when one is need of something. To be prepared for challenges in this competent world. Always have in mind that by playing the game you have to know how to play in result of less fouls. Finally they will both know if they are ready for a full committed relationship.
here are the questions that need to be answered:
What is the topic sentence? Does it accurately state the main idea of the paragraph? write down what you believe to be the paragraph's main point.
Do the examples include adequately supportrt the topic sentence? Does the author need to add examples or further develop those already include?
Does the author use any transitions words or phrases to introduce the examples? If not, suggest one or two words or phrases that would be appropriate.
Does the paragraph end abruptly, or has the author included a concluding statement that sums things up for the reader?
sorry it's so long. i missed the day it needed to be proof read and i need to turn this in tomorrow. i appreciate your help.
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