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can u guys proofread n giv me some suggestions or smfin?coz im pretty c**p at descriptive writing and i seriously need help!plus im not really good with adjectives and sentences n all..can u tell me if its too short or do i need 2 make it longer or anythin n how can i change it or sumthin..you can also change the sentence or add any extra sentences if u want..up to youso here goes..As I walked through the entrance, I could feel the cold breeze blew against my cheek.The place was filled with all types of rides such as the ghost ride, the roller coaster and many more. I could hear the squeals of excitement from the children as the corkscrew ride whizzed high into the air. People were queuing for all the favorite rides such as the Roller Coaster and the Ghost train. The music blared continuously and played all the top songs and young teens danced to the sounds. As the tour train passed me I could hear the joy of laughter of the children’s inside it.
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