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People from all over the world are fascinated with the city of Los Angeles. Each year tourists from around the world come to Los Angeles. They come to visit famous landmarks like Grauman’s Chinese Theater, hoping to see where famous movie and television stars have had their handprints, footprints, and signatures in concrete. Tourists also love to drive down Rodeo Drive to go sightseeing or shop at upscale stores like Gucci, Louis Vuitton, Prada, and Tiffany & Co., just to name a few. Some people hope to catch a glimpse of someone famous coming out of these stores. On the other hand, there are some people who don’t understand why someone would want to move or live in Los Angeles. Los Angeles is seen as an over-populated city where natural disasters like earthquakes and wildfires happen frequently. Like many other cities, Los Angeles has its advantages and disadvantages that people enjoy like the wonderful weather, diversity, and job opportunities.

Living in Los Angeles offers diversity in people, cultures and food. There are all kinds of different ethnicities from around the world that live in Los Angeles. Therefore, there are many different kinds of restaurants that people can choose from. These restaurants can range from P.F. Chang’s to Roscoe’s House of Chicken’n Waffles to In-N-Out Burgers. They can choose to eat Chinese food, Japanese food, Vietnamese food and also American food on different days. There are also many places where people can go to like, Chinatown, Thai Town, and Little Tokyo. This kind of diversity makes living in Los Angeles a great way to experience different cultures. For example, people can at a workplace where there are many employees of different ethnicities and there is a language barrier, so they communicate with each other in different languages besides English. Los Angeles also offers a taste of the different cultures living in this diverse city.

There are many job opportunities for people who live in Los Angeles as well. People can work in the Los Angeles County or work for the City. Jobs like clerks, architect, and engineering pay higher salaries with benefits. Los Angeles also offers a variety of jobs in the film and television industry. Therefore, people live and move to L.A. because they are aspire to fulfill their dreams of becoming actors, actresses or broadcasters in Hollywood or Burbank where Walt Disney, Warner Brothers, CNN, and Paramount Studios are located. There are also many shopping centers like malls and outlets around Los Angeles where retail jobs are available. This makes L.A. a good place not only for students to work and go to school at the same time, but also for people who are looking for part-time job or full-time job.

Another advantage of living in Los Angeles is the great weather. People like living in Los Angeles because they can go to the beach and the mountains year round. During the winter it does not get too cold, with temperatures dropping down to about 40 degrees at night and sometimes 80 degrees during the day. For example, people can go to Snow Summit at Big Bear Mountain to play in the snow, go snowboarding or skiing and the next day they can go to the beach. During the summer time it can get pretty hot with temperatures in the mid 90’s to the low 100’s. For example, people can go outside to the beach, go to a park to have a picnic or go to water parks like Raging Waters and Hurricane Harbor. Although, due to Los Angeles lack of rain, there are fire-warning alerts throughout the hottest time of the year. The fires can occur along hillsides, mountains, and very dry brush areas where the heat of the sun or a cigarette can ignite a wildfire.

Although, one can find oneself getting around L.A. is not always easy. Traffic in and around the city can be a disadvantage. The freeways do not always move as smoothly as they can. Rush hour traffic can be daunting and frustrating especially if one had to drive through it. Los Angeles is home to some of the busiest freeways in the country. With gas prices rising and with no end in sight, people are finding different ways to get from point A to point B. For instance, people are trying to carpool or ride the bus or the Metro in order to get to work and around the city. Some families only drive their cars on the weekends to go on family outings.

Another disadvantage of living in Los Angeles is the cost of living. Many people cannot afford to buy a home because the rising housing market prices. For example, a house with 3 bedrooms and 2 bathrooms can be very expensive depending on the area. This is why many people cannot afford to buy a house at this time. If they cannot afford to pay for it, the bank takes it back. This is the reason why there are a lot of foreclosed homes because homeowners are not able to pay their mortgage. Rent is also on the rise in L.A. An apartment can rent for a few thousand dollars monthly for a 2 bedroom and 1 bath apartment. Therefore, it is really hard for people to maintain a comfortable living in Los Angeles with the rising cost of living.

Finally, the crime rate in Los Angeles is also pretty high. This is true of many cities but Los Angeles is home to many gangs. Gang violence and homicides happen at an alarming rate and unfortunately innocent people are killed because rival gang members shoot at each other. It is not only homicides that occur, but also robbery that happen everyday in the Los Angeles area.

Despite all the disadvantages, I continue living in Los Angeles. I like being a part of the melting pot that Los Angeles has to offer. I like having friends of different ethnicities as we go out to different restaurants because I get to taste different foods and learn more about their cultures. I also love the summer weather in Los Angeles because I can go to the beach to play some beach volleyball. Although, I do get frustrated with running into traffic, the cost of living and the crime rate. It helps that I have a strong bond with my family and friends around the Los Angeles area.

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  1. i dont feel like reading this but i need this question answered

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  2. I have made suggestions in the text.

    People from all over the world are fascinated with the city of Los Angeles. Each year tourists from nations scattered across the earth come to California to visit Los Angeles. They come to see famous landmarks like Grauman’s Chinese Theater, where famous movie and television stars have had their handprints, footprints, and signatures preserved in concrete for posterity. Tourists also love to cruise down Rodeo Drive sightseeing or to go shopping at upscale stores like Gucci, Louis Vuitton, Prada, and Tiffany & Co. People hope to catch a glimpse of some famous someone shopping in these stores. On the other hand, there are also people who don’t understand why anyone would want to live in Los Angeles. Los Angeles to them is an over-populated city where natural disasters like earthquakes and wildfires are constant dangers. Like many other cities, Los Angeles has advantages that people enjoy, like the wonderful weather, cultural diversity, and job opportunities.

    Living in Los Angeles offers diversity in people, cultures and food. People of many different ethnicities from around the world have built communities in Los Angeles. These folks operate restaurants offering many different cuisines. These restaurants can range from P.F. Chang’s to Roscoe’s House of Chicken’n Waffles to In-N-Out Burgers. One may choose to eat Chinese food, Japanese food, Vietnamese food and/or American food on different days. There are also many ethnic enclaves like Chinatown, Thai Town, and Little Tokyo. This diversity offers Los Angelenos a variety of different cultures to experience. For example, people at a workplace where there is a language barrier because there are many employees of different ethnicities communicate with each other in languages other than English.

    There are many job opportunities for people who live in Los Angeles as well. People can work in Los Angeles County or work for the City. Jobs for clerks, architects, and in engineering pay high salaries with benefits. Los Angeles also offers a variety of jobs in the film and television industries. Many people move to L.A. because they aspire to careers as actors, actresses or broadcasters in Hollywood or Burbank where Walt Disney, Warner Brothers, CNN, and Paramount Studios are located. There are also many shopping malls and outlets around Los Angeles where retail jobs are available. This makes L.A. a good place, not only for students to work and go to school at the same time, but also for people who are looking for part-time jobs or full-time work.

    Another advantage to living in Los Angeles is the great weather. People like living in Los Angeles because they can go to the beach and the mountains year round. During the winter it does not get too cold, with temperatures dropping down to about 40 degrees at night and sometimes 80 degrees during the day. For example, people can go to Snow Summit at Big Bear Mountain to play in the snow, go snowboarding or skiing, and the next day they can go to the beach. During the summer, it can get pretty hot, with temperatures in the mid 90’s to the low 100’s. For example, people can go to the beach, go to a park to have a picnic or go to water parks like Raging Waters and Hurricane Harbor. Although, due to Los Angeles' lack of rain, there are fire-warning alerts during the hottest time of the year. Fires occur along hillsides, mountains, and very dry brush areas where the heat of the sun or a cigarette can ignite a wildfire.

    Getting around L.A. is not always easy. Traffic in and around the city can be a disaster. The freeways do not always move as smoothly as one would hope. Rush hour traffic is frustrating when one must drive through it. Los Angeles is home to some of the busiest freeways in the country. With gas prices rising with no end in sight, people are finding different ways to get from point A to point B. For instance, people are carpooling or riding buses or the Metro in order to get to work and around the city. Some families only drive their cars on the weekends to go on family outings.

    A major disadvantage to living in Los Angeles is the cost of living. Many people cannot afford to buy a home because of the ever-rising housing market prices. For example, a house with 3 bedrooms and 2 bathrooms can be very expensive, depending on the area. This is why many people cannot afford to buy homes at this time. If they cannot afford to pay for it, the bank takes it back. There are many foreclosed homes because homeowners are unable to pay their mortgages. Rent is also on the rise in L.A. A 2 bedroom,1 bath apartment can rent for a few thousand dollars monthly. Therefore, it is really hard for people to maintain a comfortable living in Los Angeles with the rising cost of living.

    Finally, Los Angeles has a high crime rate because Los Angeles is home to many gangs. Gang violence and homicides happen at an alarming rate and, unfortunately, innocent people are often killed accidentally because rival gang members want to kill each other. Besides homicides, robberies are everyday commonplaces in the Los Angeles area.

    Despite the disadvantages, I continue to live in Los Angeles. I like being a part of the melting pot that Los Angeles offers. I like having friends of different ethnicities, and dining in different restaurants because I enjoy tasting different foods and learning more about other cultures. I also love the L.A.'s summery weather because I can go to the beach to play beach volleyball. Although, I do get frustrated with the traffic, the cost of living and the crime rate, it helps that I have strong bonds with my family and friends in the Los Angeles area.

  3. This is too long to read through carefully, however I have skimmed it and I didn't see any glaring errors.  But the first 4 paragraphs are probably too long.  Find a logical place to separate them.

  4. Check this sentence in the second paragraph: "For example, people can at a workplace where there are many employees of different ethnicities and there is a language barrier, so they communicate with each other in different languages besides English."

    Third Paragraph, check:  "Therefore, people live and move to L.A. because they are aspire to fulfill their dreams of becoming actors, actresses or broadcasters in Hollywood or Burbank where Walt Disney, Warner Brothers, CNN, and Paramount Studios are located."

    Check Paragraph 5.  It doesn't read very smoothly, and the first sentence is confusing.

    Paragraph 7:  "Finally, the crime rate in Los Angeles is also pretty high."  Finally....also.  Maybe one or the other.

    Re-wording this sentence (paragraph 1): "Like many other cities, Los Angeles has its advantages and disadvantages that people enjoy like the wonderful weather, diversity, and job opportunities."  It would make a great thesis/ opening sentence.  

    Some of your sentences, esp. 2 in paragraph 1, run on a little.  

    Good overall.  Check spelling, the side thingy keeps telling me there are errors in the quotations I've made.

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