Can someone read this and tell me how you like it. I wrote it two years ago.?

Question

Love Lost

Missing you so much because you walked out of my life.

Please don't mistake me I really wanted to be your wife.

Come back, forgive me make me happy again.

Make things how they used to be way back when.

Love lost in the mist of the arguments and no kind of trust.

We got so caught up after a long night of lust.

I figure things weren't going to work out anyway because we hardly got along,

Because you're the "king" your always right and I am always wrong.

I guess that's love lost because at first it wasn't this way.

We used to love eachother more than the sun that lights up our day.

But things got out of hand because you thought you ran ****.

Thought you wore all the pants and the relationship, but baby, that's wasn't quite it.

Things have to be 50/50 excepting the good and bad things.

We should have helped eachother fly by fixing broken wings.

What's a bird without wings? What's a sky if not blue?

Broken-hearted, broken-spirited, broken wings. I cannot fly without you.

Answer 1

Both beautiful and sour.

Answer 2

I think it sounds good.

Answer 3

Come, forgive me, make me happy again

Make things how they were way back when

Love lost in the fights- no kind of trust

We got so caught up after a night of lust

Things didn't work- we hardly got along

Because you're the 'king' and I'm always wrong

Love lost- at first it wasn't this way

We used to love each other more than the sun loves the day

Things got out of hand because you thought you ran ****

Thought you wore the pants with us, but that wasn't quite it.

Things have to be equal accepting good and bad things

We should've helped each other fly by fixing broken wings

What's a bird without wings? What's a sky if not blue?

Broken hearted, broken spirited- I can't fly with out you

The first two lines didn't match up with the rest, and I kinda shortened it. You can just ignore my version, but I did my best to even out the syllables (there were way too many in each line, and they were kind of choppy.  

Answer 4

it sounds amazing... :)