Can someone read this for me, then tell me what they think?

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Hey, can someone with a lot of time on there hands read a story I've been working on? I don't want to post it on here, because it's LONG! so if you could I'll just E mail it too you, it's about a girl that finds out she has a power (it seems like all books are now-a-days *sarcasm*) but she gets kidnapped then... yeah...I'll just leave it at that.

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