Can u comment on my poem before i go to bed please??

Question

"in a room alone"

tangled webs and wisps of hair

i hide behind

searching through

the black of night colliding

into shapes and figures i don't know

eyes peeled skinless

in a room alone

with things that could be there

in silence blank

hopes like shadows drift

becoming ghosts

haunted breathless

in a room alone

with things that are not there

minds apart

like feathers plucked

darting light and separate

through the air

the loss of wings

below these tragedies

in our rooms alone

with things no longer there

Answer 1

its quite scary. so i guess its supposed to be like that? very imaginative & u've used alot of colourful [descriptive] language. awesome :D

Answer 2

very good.

have a good night sleep now. :)

Answer 3

I liked it :)

Answer 4

wow

I am fast becoming a fan of your words.... when I finished reading this my throat hurt - difficult to achieve that level of tugging at heart strings here.......

after reading the other thoughts; so may thoughts, points of view....  I am "wow" -impressed...

reminds me of looking for lost dreams, memories...and realizing they are no longer there...or never were, false hope...  a sadness - greyness, not black....

-in the room-  actually reminds me of the seperated, disjointed....

online - internet - society even - stumbling

again very awesome and thank you for sharing

asking for our opinion - comments

Answer 5

I can see you lost something before you were ready to lose it, and it has affected your personality greatly.

Overall the imagery is great.

Answer 6

I love the flow and the imagery. I'm begging myself to discect the meaning, but I'm getting tired and keep forgetting my train of thought. haha

Answer 7

"Hi!"

Very Dark, but all the same very creative.

Answer 8

yeah its good did u write it when you were angry?

Answer 9

i loved it ...

very dark but clam

goodnight