Can u help me fix this short passage?

Question

I have done watching two seasons of Smallville. Besides the unusual plot and special effects, what I love most about it is the romantic part at the end of each episode, all seasons included. With an appearance of an Eastern girl, unbelievably beautiful Lana will come to find Clark at the barn when all the troubles get past. And the thing is she can always say something enlightening or hear something touching. They give each other the kind of look I’ve been longing to get from someone, a look full of passion and softness. And these scenes never lack the company of great music. Together they create an atmosphere in which my soul luxuriates and casts an enchantment of affections over me…

Answer 1

I have finished watching two seasons of Smallville. The unusual plot and special effects is what makes the episodes tick. Each episode concludes in a romantic fashion leaving one with a warm feeling in the heart. With an appearance of an Eastern girl, unbelievably beautiful Lana will come to find Clark at the barn and all the troubles will be a part of the past. She always says something enlightening or gets to hear something touching. The look of passion and softness seals an electrifying chemistry between them. The scenes are adorned with beautiful music.

*sorry the last sentence did not seem to fit*

Answer 2

I have -- (just) finished-- watching two seasons of Smallville.  Besides the unusual plot and the --(incredible)-- special effects, what I love most about it is the romantic part at the end of each episode.  With the appearance of an Eastern --(is she Asian?  Eastern European?)-- girl, the unbelievably beautiful Lana comes to find Clark at the barn when all the troubles --(here I am confused about what you mean)-- get past.  And the thing is, she can always say something enlightening or hear --(this is awkward in English)-- something touching.  They give each other the kind of look I've been longing to get from someone, a look full of passion and softness.  And these scenes never lack the company --(accompaniment)-- of great music.  Together they create an atmosphere in which my soul luxuriates and casts an enchantment of affections over me.

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Overall, you did a REALLY great job, especially near the end.  The last three sentences are incredible.

Just to explain my correcting marks:

1) --bla bla bla-- means "this needs to be fixed."

2) --(bla bla bla)--- means "this is what I suggest."