Can u please check this letter for me??? ?

Question

Can u please check this letter for me??? ?

i had to write a letter to my teacher about what i did don the summer and this is what i wrote so can u please check for grammar mistakes and misspelling???

and how can i make it a little longer??? and sound smarter ??

thanks a lot

Dear, Mrs. Jennifer,

It’s amazing how time flies. This summer was truly my favorite summer, not only because I saw my aunt and cousins for the first time, but also because I did a lot of fun activities. For example, I went to Niagara Falls, Canada’s Wonderland and got my first summer job. But, I do have I to say that the most exciting part of my summer job was when I got my first paycheck.

Even though the summer was great, I am very glad that I had to come back to school, not only because I get to see my friends again but also because I missed doing homework, solving problems and having to go to school.

Answer 1

It should be Dear Mrs. Jennifer, not Dear, Mrs. Jennifer.

I would put 'This summer was truly my favorite summer of my life so far' or something like that. What you have now doesn't sound right for some reason.

The rest of it sounds good. Good job!!

Answer 2

You only need ONE comma in your salutation.

"Dear Mrs. Jennifer,"

You have an unnecessary comma.

"This summer was truly my favourite summer because not only did I get to see my aunt and cousins for the first time, I also got to do many fun activities!"

Never start a sentence with but. It's improper grammar.

"...and got my first summer job but, the most exciting part of my summer was getting my first paycheck."