Can you check my book report for errors?

Question

this is the criteria that i need to meet. http://aurora-schools.org/school_NewsArticle.aspx?artID=949&schoolID=1

(click on summer reading link)

this is my report. (it is double spaced in word)

This summer I read the book, “Deep Green”, by Melody Carlson. I chose this book because I had read the first book in the “Color Me” series. I enjoyed the other book so, decided to read the second book. This book also seemed interesting because it was about high school experience, and when things go wrong in high school.

T his book fits the theme of “facing difficult life decisions” perfectly. This book is about a girl named Jordan, who recently became a cheerleader. The head cheerleader Shawna became one of her best friends. But Jordan really likes Shawna's boyfriend, Tim. After Tim gets to know Jordan, he dumps Shawna and asks Jordan out. Then come all the decisions that Jordan has to make, should she lose her new friendship for some boy that she just met?

After she makes, what later seems like the wrong decision, Shawna seeks revenge, and Jordan has to make a decision, fight back, or to just give up Tim. Shawna later finds a way steals Tim back, and Jordan can't decide what to do, because she knows a way to get Tim back. But that way is something she doesn't think shes ready to do. She now has to make a very important decision, something that she might regret for the rest of her life. Jordan's old friend Cara might have a solution, Cara recently became religious, and believes that if Jordan did too, God would bring the the answer to her problem. Only Jordan doesn't think God exists and thinks that he is incapable of helping her. But a twist of events, helps her make the right decision.

I would recommend this book to most teenage girls. This book is a real life situation, that others might actually be facing. The only reason I would not recommend this book to some, is if they did not enjoy books involving religion. This book involves getting over your problems, by starting to believe in god. Other than that, this book is a great read for readers above 14 years old.

Answer 1

in the fourth line in between about and high add an a

at the beggining of your 2nd paragraph get rid of the T and capitalize his

on the 14th line ad a to between way and steal

16th line you need a aphostophe on shes

18th line get rid of the commma between religious & and

19th line get rid of the comma between too & god

23d line get rid of the comma between situation & that

ohh yeah you need to indent each time you start a a new paragraph

hope i helped  

Answer 2

This is pretty good other than a couple of errors...

Line 3-other book so (no comma) (I) decided to read the...

Line 10-...Jordan has to make(.) Should she lose...

Line 6th from last(lol)- her. But, (in a) tist of events, ...

Answer 3

This summer I read the book,(titles should be underlined)  ÃƒÂ¢Ã‚€ÂœDeep Green”, by Melody Carlson. I chose this book because I had read the first book in the( again) “Color Me” series. I enjoyed the other book so, decided to read the second book. This book also seemed interesting because it was about high school experience, and when things go wrong in high school.

This (you spaced t his like that ) book fits the theme of “facing difficult life decisions” perfectly. This book is about a girl named Jordan, who recently became a cheerleader. The head cheerleader Shawna became one of her best friends. But Jordan really likes Shawna's boyfriend, Tim. After Tim gets to know Jordan, he dumps Shawna and asks Jordan out. Then come all the decisions that Jordan has to make, should she lose her new friendship for some boy that she just met?

After she makes, what later seems like the wrong decision, Shawna seeks revenge, and Jordan has to make a decision, fight back, or to just give up Tim. Shawna later finds a way steals Tim back, and Jordan can't decide what to do, because she knows a way to get Tim back. But that way is something she doesn't think shes ready to do. She now has to make a very important decision, something that she might regret for the rest of her life. Jordan's old friend Cara might have a solution, Cara recently became religious, and believes that if Jordan did too, God would bring the the answer to her problem. Only Jordan doesn't think God exists and thinks that he is incapable of helping her. But a twist of events, helps her make the right decision.

I would recommend this book to most teenage girls. This book is a real life situation, that others might actually be facing. The only reason I would not recommend this book to some, is if they did not enjoy books involving religion. This book involves getting over your problems, by starting to believe in god. Other than that, this book is a great read for readers above 14 years old.

p.s. if you like high school stuff watch the tv show secret life of an american teenager its on abc family at 900 clock (i live on the east coast)

Answer 4

"T his" in the fifth line should be "This"

And in the second last line God should be capitalized.

Otherwise its good.

Answer 5

fix T  There is a space THIS BOOK FITS THEM....

also fix  boyfriend, tim. after tim. That's wordy.

where is your thesis? a thesis is the statement to set up your entire paper you jump around too much. It sounds like your saying like and this and that too much.

fix: this book is a real life situation, than other might actually be facing.

Change to

This book covers situations in life that youth my age can relate to. That by reading about other peoples problems, it helps us to gain an understanding of our own. Thus, creating a new perspective for us to look at life in a new way.

You may want to change the god bit to. I don't know how strict your school is on religion in the room.

also add how the story helped you. why you would read it and recommend it.

Try going more into depth about it. What about the characters feelings and perspectives. Also the thesis you need a thesis.

good luck kid. You can do it.