Can you check out my story? Please, it would mean alot.

Question

I am debating on trying to get published, and i need personal opinions on it. I know this probably bugs some of you people to death, but it really would mean alot! I don't need you to judge my style of writing, just if there's a chance that anyone would like it. The story line is not finished yet, i'm kinda making it up as i go, so be open minded, =)

Please? :) thanks for all that help. Here is the link:

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/wildchild094/302969/

Answer 1

I really liked it.  Your writing flows very well, but now it's killing me to know what's going to happen to Trevy.  Very good job

Answer 2

It's REALLY good! It kind of gives hope to some of the geeks out there. Except hurry up and write another chapter so we know what happens please! haha :)