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Can you comment on another Black Hole poem?

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Black hole

By Cynthia S.

Black hole, they say, was a star

large, shining, seen from afar.

in a fit of age it exploded.

Fell into itself, it did

hole with gravity for a lid

No light letting out.

I expect I’ll explode someday

one thing I have to pray

don’t let me fall in on myself.

Let me be fireworks instead.

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  1. Very different outlook - thank you.  Whether it be implosion or explosion - it probably will be beyond our control. Our only mission is to - make it as beautiful and noteworthy as we can ♥


  2. My only criticism is the word exploded should be imploded.  Well done, my lady, well done indeed.

  3. I really enjoyed reading your poem

  4. "Hi!"

    I agree to go out with a bang,

    I want to be a vibrant colour of space.

    To display my existence.

    of what once was.

    Great poem

    Cheers : )

  5. It seems all the good people above me said it best.......

    Well done & nice job ........

    Have s great week!!!

  6. "Not with a bang,

    but a whimper."

    Don't want it that way!!

  7. 'Rage', not 'age'. And it needs more punctuation. Shows promise. (Ah, I see...'fit of age'...it's a pun.)

  8. Your short poem is sweet. I like the narrative. I feel like that sometimes...like my own world is caving in...

    You were able to sum up a lot of emotion in a few words where many longer poems fail.  Well done. A+

  9. Clever this is, it sparkles, I like it. Kudos

  10. Your poem shows inspired thought and striking description. I suggest leaving the word age and accepting Dondi's suggestion.

  11. Work on the spelling...but I liked it, actually.

  12. May you be a roman candle

    perched atop a black cat stand

    exploding... a thousand stars

    horizons light... brigter now

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