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Can you connect my poem with MY interpretation?

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Ok, please, first read my poem, think about it, see if it means anything to you, then read the explanation, line by line, below it. Does it make sense now? Was the poem misleading/confusing? how? Do you like it? Thank you very much.

The Birth of Celestial Bodies

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A smaller strain of consciousness forms my galaxies

Varied sentience, synergistic in me

The guise of self is cancer causing disunity

Spatial bodies, microcosms repeat

Our source of life evolving over time to get through

Double helix, whispered secrets in you

Those paranoid and predatory veiling the truth

Mind controlling, and distracting on cue

Another hidden presence speaks image in dreams

Conscience crying, ego dying in me

A timeless influence from nowhere piercing through sleep

The over-mind, underlying all things.

Some crucial mysteries claim to be un-pursued

Space is yawning, spawning questions in you

The ruling hand of shepherds weeding out the confused

Inquisition, the imposition they choose

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  1. well i didn't understand the first verse but i noticed the second verse meant so much... just four lines could mean so much of how the innocence is gone there literally is no innocence in the world anymore... we lost this a long time ago and we're slowly no... quickly destroying what we could find again. this poem i think was a wake up call to you while you wrote it the life we choose is so different from the life people want you to choose... that is when we lost the innocence... the control.... and almost nobody thinks this way because they're in a spell... deceived of who they really are and it truly saddens me deeply...


  2. After you described the poem I understood it, but before that no I didn't understand. I almost perfer your expanation over the poem. Is there any way you can make a poem out of that very explanation. The flow of the poem is great with a great rymes, but as far as anyone else following your consept with out an explenation I don't think its possable.

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