Can you give me a story review from the summery of my story?

Question

A girl name Bonnie has life like h**l. Her mother died an unknown death, her father married a woman who seems to hate everything Bonnie does, And she has no one to depend on through life. And the only person who knows her is the one she is destined to love. But what if her love for him is threatened because of her past and now maybe even her future.

Please tell me what you think.

Answer 1

I think its a great plot.With a bit more details it would be the best. Hope you keep writing!!!!

Answer 2

Sounds like a great idea!!!

I love the sound of it...

Answer 3

it sounds run-of-the-mill but likeable enough

Answer 4

Sounds great!! are Alice and Bella C Alice and Bella Cullen???? lol Best series EVER!!!

Answer 5

Me likey =D lol

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Answer 6

Personally for romantic addicts they'll love it, it sounds cliff hangery and it would make me click on the story. But it does sound predictable like other stories, no offense but nobody will know unless they read. I think you'll do great already because you have zero errors, major pet peeve of mine.

Answer 7

Great, but there is a teeny tiny mistake. You need a question mark at the end of 'But what if...even her future.'

'What if' is a question.

Also, a lot of people get annoyed when you start a sentence with but or and.

You don't need 'A girl named' at the start. And you might want to change...let's just try again.

Bonnie's life is like h**l. Her mother died an unknown death, her father's new wife hates her and she feels like she cannot depend on anyone. The only person who knows her is the one she is destined to love.

   However, her love for him is threatened by her past and now...maybe even her future.

It does sound like a good book, though.