So I am offcially obsessed with vampires. But I got tired of reading about "vegetarian" vampires. I wanted a story about a good, old fashioned, I eat humans vampire. So here's an excerpt from what I have so far. I would really appreciate feedback!
I only knew one thing for certain. He wanted to kill me. It was not at all like the vampire romance books I craved. This was no Edward Cullen standing before me now, ready to spring if I should attempt a useless escape. At least he was good looking. That much Hollywood got right. In a strange, sick, almost demented way, this pleased me. God forbid I be killed by an ugly vampire. His blood red eyes appraised me as I stood paralyzed with fear. A self satisfied smirk spread across his long, handsome face, only to be replaced by a frown as his eyes traveled upward to meet mine. “I must say,†he said, running a hand through his shaggy ink colored hair, “I am a bit unnerved by your silence. My favorite part is hearing the screams.â€Â
As he glowered at me in an unfriendly manner, my brain went blank. One small part of me was tempted to provoke him; to get this over with. But the other side of me, the now barely functioning logical side knew it would be wise to keep him talking. Struggling to make sense of the words that suddenly flushed through my brain, I finally managed to choke out, “Sorry to disappoint.†Desperate for a few minutes more of life, I racked my brain to find a comment that required a response. “Isn’t it rude to play with your food?†I forced out through the thick haze of fear that clouded my mind.
This earned a chuckle from him, and a few seconds more of life for me. “Yes,†he replied, as the glower on his face turned to thoughtfulness. “But do the rules of etiquette apply here? After all, I’m a vampire, you’re a human. I’m about to kill you. Hardly a situation for Ms. Manners to dissect.†His tone was friendly, almost sympathetic, but it could not hide the threat lace within.
Thanks in advance!
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