Can you guys give me your opinions of my poem?

Question

i have been on a poem hiatus for awhile, i dont like to write poems that use the "rule" i just write what i feel so can you give me your opinions?

as life floats by

i am left behind

to watch everyone else

do what i can only dream of.

they all laugh and enjoy themselves

as i am trapped behind closed doors.

growing older and looking at the past

life continues.

even if it is not a blast

missing the greatest things a teen could ever experience

having no stories to tell one day

life floats by

and all i can say

is that i watched it afar

but never stepped out

never had that chance

now i must grow up

be an adult

no more time for fun and games

the "good" years over.

life floats by

and somehow i missed it.

Answer 1

I think that you should forget about your past and things that have happened to you . They are obviously getting you down . Try thinking of good things and focus on that . You are a very good writer and you should keep writing poems , but more happy and about the beauty of life ! I wrote a monologue about bullying and it was very depressing and had bits of sexual abuse in it . People thought this actually happened to me ! It didn't ! I was just doing a homework assignment ! It was quite funny though . Try and look at the good things in life x

Answer 2

u just need more s*x thats all