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Can you guys tell me if you honestly like this poem I just wrote??

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I existed as a plague

Memorizing movie lines with no real intent,

Day old relationships built and broken with the luxury of no remorse.

I was a sinner,

But only because it’s what they called me.

They named me something from pages in books,

Riddled me and put my own story into context.

I created a defense against myself and imagined a meaningful dialogue with who I am and who I’d like to become.

We’d say back and forth to each other things we don’t really mean and make promises that neither can keep.

I offered up myself to my own mirage of self conflict and comfort in the nothing that followed from my tongue to my mind in eager footsteps. I aborted my reason, and gave no real reason in its place.

I poisoned myself with the ability to believe that something would be waiting for me when my imagination would begin to forsake me and send me back to what they believe they see.

I rationed these thoughts into “would be” and “couldn’t be” like the road won’t end at the end of the rope.

I adjusted and asphyxiated any questions that my conscience might draw up as I remember to breathe.

I’m not dead yet.

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  1. Your use of vocab is impressive. Some people might get irritated by a poem that uses 'i' too much, but personally i like it. It is quite hard to read into, ma be a title could help that. But over all well done.


  2. wow! your something!

    its great!

    keep doing that kinda work & you'll be making money from this work! xx

  3. Oh My Gosh!!!!!

    It is so beautiful!!!!

    Love It!!!!!!

  4. Its really good. Reminds me of the way I write poems.

  5. wow thatz like crazy good. u got some mad writing skillz!

  6. If that is a poem then I ama Rocket Scientist.

    Well written prose yes, but random, no poetry at all.

  7. i like it.

  8. yet?? who says you are going to die... need more info before i can make my decision, is that how you really want the poem to end?

  9. you must be edgar allen poe's daughter.

  10. wow

    just wow

    you truely have a talent =)

  11. Normally i prefer rhyming poems, but this one has a meaning, i actually understand what your saying, so i must say i think its very good :D

    keep it up x

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