Can you help me out and tell me what you think about one of my poems?

Question

That Night

Nothing went rite. It all went wrong.

It’s too late I will never see the break of dawn.

I say good bye to a world I learned to hate yet loved so much.

Mom ill miss you. Send dad my love.

It’s all wrong .This can’t be my life.

I try to respond to the voice yet I don’t make a sound.

I try to scream as the voice says “She’s gone.”

“NO!” I scream. “I’M STILL HERE!”

I focus all of my energy as I feel the blanket come over me.

I mutter a little word, but it saved my life.” Help me.” I said.

I heard someone scream “she’s alive!”

“Thank God” I head a woman shriek “You saved my baby’s life.”

I will never forget that night

when you were taken form my life.

You were pronounced dead at four a.m.

I loved you so much. You were my best friend.

If only you cried for help you would still be in my life.

Although you always will be with me

I got pregnant that night.

Answer 1

good - u have something in u - just carry on and don't get frequent pregnant - loll