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I am an Indian, and hence, my story is based in a small town in India. I hope you like it.

Some three years back, Mr Narayan had big plans for his life - after he gets his MBA degree from the Vijay Kumar University, he was planning go to Delhi, where he would apply for the post of General Manager in a high profile company. His plans – obviously – did not take the required shape. His parents fell in deep debt and were unable to afford his education.

He bent his head, and gave a nod of approval to marry an empty-headed girl from a lower cast, for the sake of dowry that would help his parents to pay back the debt. The debts were paid back, but the incomplete education was never completed. He was now doomed to sit in his fathers shop and sell spices at a marginal price to the poor people. Three years passed, without a speck of change in his life.

One day his friend Raj came to him. There was an unusual ecstasy in his voice:

Answer 1

Narayan and his wife discover the internet at the internet cafe. He goes on to learn computing skills, starts a small business delivering internet access to the community he is in, his wife has two babies, they live happily ever after.