Can you please take a look at this?

Question

Warning: for those who don't like...any type of gore, don't read!

I need some critiques on this poem please

-------Victim---

It's pleasing how it drips and drips

From my knife, and finger tips

Now you lie in crimson seas

Futile were your begs and pleas..

Ah the fun was such a rush!

The screams are now a subtle hush..

I'll get away and disapear...

When I leave you lying here..

That breath you take may be your last

So thank you dear, I had a blast!

Answer 1

it says so much, it so much meaning in it. i think it's awsome!!!

Answer 2

That made my blood run cold, WOW, I love it so much. You need to write more and share, you are so d**n gifted.

Answer 3

very interesting, if your trying to scare us good job. that was pretty scary!!

Answer 4

Different.. but I like it! KEEP IT UP!

Answer 5

Great job, I really enjoyed it. The rhythm really had me going.

You should really submit it to http://www.papertank.com and see what they think. I bet you could get a high rating for it on there!

Answer 6

it was very deep,i liked it good job can you see mine pls =]

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^thanks