Can you please tell me what you think of my poem?

Question

Again I am regressing

In a state of agression

Windy and toughtless

A life very so careless

Lights are bright

In verticle night

A green april

A thoughtless thrill

Free of chess

A brief push press

The independence road

And out of the load

If free out at the einstein

Then in stearing out in the question

At his mouse and his proust

Which of a hire is this wire

Answer 1

Is this poem based on being out of a situation, school perhaps? Anyways, I like your use of metaphors and words; they flow very well with one another. Keep writing, for this is very good.

Answer 2

pretty good 4/5 too short i felt like you could of added a bit more

just my opinion

Answer 3

Its need some work--It has promise but some on the lines don't make sense

"A life very so careless"? It doesnt sound quite right nor the line before it

The next four lines kind of thud, instead of flow

I would work with it some more

Answer 4

i just thought it was really terrible.

Answer 5

phail