Can you rate my poem. It's titled My wish?

Question

If I had a jeanie and had three wishes I would only wish for two.

For the world to change into a better place and forever to have you.

I would never change my complications because the struggle is what makes you stronger.

And the ones who appreciate the struggle in life are the ones who live longer.

I would never ask for money because money doesn't make me as happy as you do.

In fact money makes people who are happy usually turn blue.

So since I can sacrifice the unnecessary and put it on a shelf.

My wishes are dedicated to happiness and nothing much else.

Answer 1

It's a sweet poem!  It made me smile today  :) ...Thanks!

Answer 2

You should try and stick with one motto or motif or subject. Like you went from getting a girl to talking about how problems make you stronger to how money affects people. One subject will do. Try to go in with an end in mind. If I don't have a beginning or an end I don't even fool with writing it.

Answer 3

cute but jeanies aren't real

Answer 4

sorry to say i struggled with this one, i failed to finish iy even tho its so short. my guess is yu're still developing your writing skills, guess what? so am i. the day stop doing that is the day i give up on poetry... so keep on keeping on, if yu catch my drift! good luck