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Can you rate my poem with a 1-10, comments appreciated?

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Paint my picture; hang it up on your wall

next to the knife in that voodoo doll.

Clip my pictures out of these magazines

on to the pages that turn your dreams.

and you run your hands under the running waters,

but the stains don't come off.

Take my soul; drag it through the sand.

Leave me to die inside this framed land.

and these bloodshot eyes no longer hold back

the tears that seep in between through the cracks.

and you run your hands under the running waters,

but the stains don't come off; they won't come off.

Now your crimson stained hands clutch the cold, cold brush

that once grazed the canvas with a shade of trust

never to forget the pain and the rush

of the way he looked at you.

and you run your hands under the running waters

but the stains don't come off.

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  1. I rated it 7 it is missing something. and really sad...


  2. 8

    I really like this poem because it seem to have some sort of important secret that the speaker holds inside his heart or something really horrible that the person did but didnt want to tell anyone. I took off two points because the poem didnt flow that well at the end, you should also cut down on the words you use so that the poem would flow more smoothly. Maybe you should end the poem differently.

  3. dark, mysterious, i love it. keep writing. it's a 10. and love your name.

  4. wow id give it at least a 9. Kinda dark sounding but still really good

  5. I rate it an 8. This poem seems like it's really deep from how life can feel for us at times, i like it. Its ineresting and strong in a spiritual way.

  6. i am gonna rate it 9. i liked ur choice of words and ur feelings were clearly exposed. but it was kinda sad at the same time. but it really is awesome. i took of a point for the sadness of the poem but still it was touching. i don't think i should have taken those points off. sorry. it really is great and meaningful. it had a very good message. it conveyed the message that how broken up u were because of........? failed love, or bad friend or not a trustable person. but i loved ur song. it was so................... touching.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i even got some inspiration and i also have started writing a sad song to express myself.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  7. wow...that was really good.

    i'd give it probably a 9.

    it's really descriptive, but I can't really understand what you're talking about. I get the overall mood though.

    It makes you really feel, although sad, it's really good.

    is it about a father? lover? brother? or just a generalization of all the people in your life that you thought were there for you?

    by the way, your poetry's really good, ever thought about becoming a writer?

  8. This was an awesome poem i just absolutely loved it your technique and rhythm and the wording does it for me great job! definately a 10

  9. that's so nice!! i loved it...its a 9, i never give 10 because i do not know what the achievement of perfection is.

  10. wow. that's really beautiful. definitely a 10.

    i especially like the part "now your crimson stained hands clutch the cold, cold brush that once grazed the canvas with a shade of trust".

    it embodies a sort of myteriousness, darkness, and delicate aura.

    keep writing :]

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