Can you relate to my poem....Would love Comments?

Question

I'm 15, just started writing poetry in the last month or so. It is about a true event in my life.

What do you think of my poem?

How does it make you feel?

"Tears from Within"

Tryin to hide; it’s not working as planned,

Seeing my life; finding it hard to stand,

For I never thought I’d see the day,

I let a guy do it that way.

I felt the warmth; of his hand,

Against my ribs; my neck; my hand.

Feeling the breath ripped from inside,

I had an attack; I couldn’t hide.

I was shaking; couldn’t stay steady,

What have I done; I wasn’t ready.

Days went by; still seeing the guy,

I realise now; the reason why.

He wasn't in love; I started to cry.

A month went on; I still wonder why,

He kept coming back; when i'd said goodbye.

Thankyou.. all comments welcome.

Answer 1

That poem is brilliant your not afraid to get deep with your poems which I feel we could all relate 5 out of 5 stars.

Answer 2

Beautiful.

I could imagine the scene in my head.

Great job.

Answer 3

i could relate this to me

great poem!

exactly knew how it feels...

Answer 4

I really like it, it is a really meaningful poem. yes i can relate to it, as i am sure many people can. good luck with your future poetry.

Answer 5

Great job hun, this is a pain just about every girl can relate to it reminds me of my first time.... but life go's on and love eventually finds its way ....

Answer 6

loved it

i could really relate to it myslef

the last 2 lines are really amazing!

good work

keep it up

Answer 7

I really love it.

Good emotive language.

8/10

Answer 8

Wow, you have a real talent with words, I felt 15 again reading it (I'm 34 now) I remember all the emotions you portray. You have a gift with placing emotions in to words, perhaps you should look further in to writing. However, I also hope this guy hasn't drained from you the ability to love and trust again. There are a lot of guys out there who are only in it for the quick satisfaction, but now and then youc ome across a guy who really gets you, sometimes they are hard to tell apart, keep your wits about you, you're a smart girl, I'm sure you'll tell the difference. Take each guy as a learning experience so when you meet the right one, you can run with it. Best wishes to you and keep up your fabulous writing, you nearlly had me in tears!