Can you take a peep into this fantasy poem I wrote?

Question

Hearts Have Helpless Heartaches

It's just one more careful step

Into the missing and fallen stars

Above the Earth, you may just trip

On a billion broken hearts

There's a long and distant sound

Hear it ring through the night

Stop...listen to all the heartbeats

That have been stained with fright

If you can save one, then reach out

Don't let it go

Keep it near

And then you just might save a broken heart in fear

Now look back to the skies and begin to weep

For all stars and hearts that have no existing lies

If you can bare to reach out and lean

Then you have the strength to say goodbye

Just one more step

To the moonshine above ground

Now if you seem completely safe from fear

Then pull yourself back down...home...

So remember, the next journey you begin

Could lead you up to all those missing stars

And don't forget you can easily fall

Among all those billion broken hearts

Answer 1

I like it

Answer 2

I like it but the last 3 paragraphs could be worded diffrently, their alittle harder tounderstand, and the last paragraph I think u shud expand on. DONT BE AFRAID TO HAVE A LENGTHY POEM IF IT MEANS SOMTHING