Can you tell me what you see in this?

Question

*. : ~Twinkle, Twinkle Little Star*-.-~`,.+

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A tear falls from some lone stare

the death of worlds, growing cold

A change begins in astral planes

wisdom of the heavens cry

Between here and eons past

a vast array of soaring soul

sole Nova giving birth

One star dies, another to rise

In skies unknown to us on earth

a new sight from jewels on high

Prayers drift from all the years

and angels weep for fallen tears

The death of worlds, and all re-grows

yet not the same a circle made

The ring of life and death untold

A light to die and be reborn

in the twinkle of a little eye

I will say nothing of this one from myself… the poem should speak for me… I do want to hear your thoughts of what you see in it…

Answer 1

The first thing that came to my mind after reading this poem was succession: the succession that takes place after a natural disaster (I can't remember if it's primary or secondary) and how something is destroyed but then new grass comes in and nature essentially repairs itself. The next thing that I thought of was how this earth is slowly degrading as a result of human's usurpation of it. I really like the lines "One star dies...unknown to us on earth" because it gave me the picture of a sort of pheonix rising-type thing that is natural in other places but what we do to the world we live in is not meant to have happened and it's almost as if it is beyond repair.

I really liked this poem, and while my interpretation may be totally the opposite of what you had intended, I liked the wording and the way the poem was written.

Answer 2

I know that I am not the greatest poem interpreter, but when I read this poem, in my mind I can see a child sitting at her window thinking about how all these stars are born and die. It seems like it is telling a story.

I personally love the last 3 lines. In line 1, do you mean "star" or "stare". I guess it makes sense either way. When you say "sole Nova giving birth," it is like you are personifying it. I love it!

Kudos, Siren!

Answer 3

A sweeping metaphysical poem - I loved it ! I see humanity as the ultimate protagonist throughout the universe . A synoptic overview .

Poem and poet speak/write well .

:0)

Answer 4

This is breathtaking.  I have the impression of a child, and the evolving lifetimes of the child mirrored by "The ring of life and death untold" of the star, twinkling in her "little eye".  This is really an enchanting series of images and thought.  The poem has such tenderness, such pathos in the beautiful words.  I love the thought that we are made of stardust and that the evolution of our lives is mirrored in the death and rebirth of stars.  Very challenging and provocative.  Thank you.

Answer 5

Like most of your other poems, I really, really loved this one. (thank you for checking over my other one, by the way.)

I only have a few problems, mainly with your grammar...here is a list of corrections:

Line 1: Should it say 'some lone star' instead of 'stare'? Again, it may, or may not be intentional.

Line 4: You need an apostrophe after heaven...so "wisdom of the heaven's cry."

Line 6: 'Soul' must be plural in order for your sentence to make sense..."A vast array of soaring souls."

After line six, it becomes a bit incoherent as far as meaning goes. Line 7 should probably tell me what the soaring souls are doing...instead of starting a whole new concept. Am I correct? Be quick to correct me if I am wrong!

Line 9: 'earth' needs to be capitalized- it IS a proper noun.

Line 11: It would make a bit more sense if it said "Prayers drift from all those years."

Besides that, I'm scared to correct anything for fear of ruining the complex and wonderful poem you've created. I could have made a lot more grammatical corrections, if you wished it...let me know if you want me to be hypercritical or not. Either way, you would need quite a few commas, periods, semi-colons, or whatever.

You said I could be harsh, if desired...and i was, to a great degree. Forgive me for any unwanted transgressions. <3

Answer 6

This seems to be too abstracted from the raw experience too have much meaning or emotional impact. I liked the repetition of "soul...sole." It's better than so-so. But you get a gold stare for the last word of the first line. The rest is just too cosmic for me. Unlike the Nova, for me este poema no va muy bien.