Can you tell me what you see?

Question

Pebble on a String of Pearls

Comatose composure in the eyes

of all those who would hold me

to their unreachable standards

I am not what they wish me to be

There is no way to reach

the top shelf of expected propriety

In no means do I wish

to defy the constraints of good will

only the hopes of all

who have seen me grow

They want so much for me

all the things I could never gain

It is not me to be another’s poster maid

The catharsis is now

I could never be the trophy

of a royal family

It is not a sin to be just as I am,

A woman who wants to fly

Someone who hopes to help

The person that will be there for a friend

With the soul I have been given

I love all the same

I am and never will be

the victim of perceived elegance

If you have the time and care, thoughts would be welcome and appreciated…

Blessed Be, Siren

Answer 1

I see a beautiful woman who does little to show her beauty outwardly.  Those around her would like to see her "doll" up a bit.  There is some resentment toward this as she does not believe she is a doll.

Not sure if this is the point of the poem, but it is the feeling I got from it.

Answer 2

God has truly blessed you. This is a perfect work. And I'm not just talking about spelling! It is such a good presentation of who you really are and what you truly feel. I find it fascinating that you thought you were writing one thing, but wrote something else, and then decided that the 'mistake' was really an improvement. That is the essence of a sirenism. I agree, the last two lines speak the truth. You have said that you often don't understand me. Maybe it's because you think you are saying just one thing, but I see other possibilities. I think that you have no idea of just how brilliant you are. I think it is easier for you to write than to fully understand what you write. You are my favorite genius.

Answer 3

It is almost an impossible task - to live up to someone else's expectations. Other's visions - of your future - hold the seeds - of their own goals and expectations - that maybe they themselves were not able to obtain.  This picture is then thrown on another - often causing unnecessary and unfounded "guilt".  It is very hard to fulfill the dreams of another - just as hard as it is for them - to push their own dreams aside - and accept and see your own dream. It is also - a waste of precious time - that would be well spent - pursuing worthwhile goals. (Suggestion: L17 - try it without the "a" before "sin") ♥

Answer 4

that is beautifully put.

I feel the words and they move me greatly.

Thank you for sharing.

I see a single female who is simply not able to live up to the standards and ideals or to become what is expected of her,

Who is breaking free of those constraints of what others think and coming into her own as a someone she is happy with not as the victim but as the victorious.

She is the one that will never fit in with the others but is content being different.

Answer 5

I fully understand it, it really touched me. The way you put the words together gave it a deeper meaning. I guess you could say my mom is the same way. I think it's great, you should be published. Keep it up, I hope I hear your name one day.

Answer 6

i like it!  if u wrote it, ur very gifted!

Answer 7

Well, I for one, have written in my past, something quite similar.  I know the feeling of high expectations not meeting the soul within.  It hurts not to be able to be what others want, but on the other hand, being yourself is being true to what's inside and that's (believe me) a helluva lot better than spending your life pretending.

I love the piece.  It's filled with subtle disappointments, sadness, honesty, a sigh of the soul that embraces itself over what the world wants of it.  

Be blessed in return,

Autumnlovr