Check out my first full length Y!A rap?

Question

all right so i posted some other raps on here but this is my first one with a hook so let me know what you think

Sit down let me tell you about life and death

Pray for better days but I don’t hold my breath

True g’s are a dying bred ain’t many left

Getting health problems from all this stress

If your down for the cause better have a vest

when it comes to life and death i couldn't care less

I know gods there for me but hes no bullet broof vest

what are some of the great things you did

can you tell me what the meaning of life is

what if all the answers were in plain sight

beaming down on you like daylight

what if hate was the fifth element

and satan was the only one tellin it

what if you had no friends

would you still try to make amends

what if you were about to die from starvation

while you were told to use in moderation

we have children dying for rain

while others cut themselves to dull the pain

who knows whats true when we live in the land of the insaine

Sit down let me tell you about life and death

Pray for better days but I don’t hold my breath

True g’s are a dying bred and ain’t many left

Getting health problems from all this stress

If your down for the cause better have a vest

Everybody around me is a junkie

Going around sayin come on front me

Crying about how they got it rough

Shut up and man up life is tough

And it ain’t gonna change till we say enough

And they ain’t gonna be happy till we all in cuffs

Where I’m from your blessed if you leave with stitches

And for all you sniches you’ll wine up in ditches

I don’t care about some record label

We tryin to keep food on the table

Let me ask are you ready willing and able

This **** is epic but it’s far from a fable

I’m seeing the grim reaper in the mirror

caution objects are closer than they appear

Sit down let me tell you about life and death

Pray for better days but I don’t hold my breath

True g’s are a dying bred ain’t many left

Getting health problems from all this stress

If your down for the cause better have a vest

I think about the hurt and I look at the scars

I put my heart and soul into all my bars

They say you reap what you sow

I got my mind body and spirit in flow

try closing you mouth and open your mind

Keep your body unsoiled like a new baby nine

When life is troublesome I sit and reflect it

And wonder should I go out and make it hectic

I calm down and I meditate

use the earth to medicate

I don’t fall for all the lies and the deception

Sit down let me tell you about life and death

Pray for better days but I don’t hold my breath

True g’s are a dying bred and ain’t many left

Getting health problems from all this stress

If your down for the cause better have a vest

Answer 1

i gave you my feed back on the other one.

Answer 2

okay okay you did ya thing and you gets props

gud job

Answer 3

To long just came from school don't feel like reading.

Answer 4

your okay nothing special content is abit weak.

Answer 5

WOW this is really good.

Some lines could be worked on a little more, but it's reallly really good.

I know gods there for me but hes no bullet **broof** vest

**is it suppose to be proof?**

just letting you know some stuff is spelt wrong lol but its good.

Answer 6

Quit.

Answer 7

I like it...just alittle...need some changes

Answer 8

i think its ku but   i think u shud change a few words but it ku

Answer 9

WOW...YOUR REALLY GETTING GOOD.I CAN SEE YOU IN THE MUSIC INDUSTRY AS A FAMOUS SONG WRITER.GOOD LUCK, YOU CAN DO IT.