Check out my poem.. It sucks but whatever...?

Question

I got bored.. I'm not totally obsessed okay... :) Just trying out my poetry skills.. Which I obviously lack... Anyway, here's the poem:

I caught a glimpse of you

I looked away

Another glance I stole of you

It kept me, for now, at bay

I didn’t see you today

I wonder why

My friend said you left today

Without saying good-bye

It probably makes no sense to you

We’re not even friends

You don’t know my name or class

We’ve never even shook hands

Whenever I see you walk

I pretend to turn away

I watch you ‘til you turn a corner

I think of you all day

You probably think I’m stalking you

That’s what my friends all say

I guess I do stare a little

But I just can’t turn away

I wish I could forget you

But I see you everywhere

Please stop appearing here

Or here or even there

Answer 1

duuuuuuude i love the ending......i dont know of any guy who hasnt felt like that about one girl at least........you threw in some spice and added a little guy flavor.....chicks dig that

Answer 2

No Kizzy it does not suck.  It was a creative writing where you simply expressed yourself and offended no one.  It was simple and very easy to understand and from what I've read on the Hoo today,  that is a pretty rare quality.  KEEP WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 3

I dunno if you're being modest, or if you really do underestimate your self but who cares? This poem is great. I want to see more poems by you on Y! Answers.

Answer 4

omj i love it!!!! it does not suck!!!! it is soooo good! and i can really feel the emotion!!!!! but i think you should change one line

"You don't know my name or class"

i think it should be

"You don't know my name or what class i'm in"

but its just my opinoin.  

also you keep on rhyming then like stop ryhming. like the line

"We've never even shook hands."

i just think its a random line ahah...

Answer 5

what i like about poetry, is, its almost like a signature. everyone has to have one, but everyone's is so different. some are pleasently fancy. others make you smile at the messiness. one may be big, and impressive, or small and almost unnoticed. but everyone's is different.

my point is, everyone's writing style for poetry is different. Obviously this wasn't a perfect poem, which is fine, but i loved it. not necessarily the subject matter, but the way you presented it. its so different from what i normally read, its so refreshing. the way some words seemed to "accidently rhyme" (all good) and just, it was really good. i started off writing terrible poetry, and if you think this is terrible, you cant read/nor hear. ok?  you are. wow. Keep Writing. I don't except excuses, Keep Writing.

Answer 6

"Hi!"

That was a great poem. and I can relate to that a lot.

There was this guy of which we both liked each other, and I left quite suddenly without saying goodbye to anyone.

I loved how you worded it.

It made me feel like, that poem was sent from him to me.

Captured my heart. THX

WELL DONE!  : )