Check out my poem and tell me what you think ;)?

Question

you have a heart like thunder

and eyes of rain

you have hands like lightining that

wrap around my waist.

you have a smile like heaven on a stormy day

Answer 1

I dislike it (sorry) You certainly sound talented, but I just don't realate to the weather /body metaphor.

Answer 2

Unique, I like it! :)

Answer 3

Your theme has been used.  Not very original, I must say.

Answer 4

It's a nice message.

But I would re arrange the wording a little so it doesn't sound like a song chorus.

Unless it was meant to be a lymric of course.

Answer 5

Is there more?It's very descriptive...nice.