Coffee and keyboards. A good mix?

Question

Fingers dancing wildly

Hot refuse spilling about

Scolding scalding with each touch

If I had only stayed in bed

No chance of that

Too late now show time

200 minute reload

Time to purge

My daily dispensation

So sad it is really

On deaf ears it lands

I don't dare say it all

Stuck here with these keys

Unlocking my thoughts

Laughing at me again

Caution may be hot

I sit burned again

Answer 1

Excellent.  Extremely visual, which is something I really like in any writing, especially poetry because it is more difficult than in prose.

These are such great lines -- I'd separate them off in their own stanza, but that is probably not what you want.

Unlocking my thoughts

Laughing at me again

Caution may be hot

I sit burned again

And these lines are filled with subtle passion and sadness.

My daily dispensation

So sad it is really

On deaf ears it lands

Beautiful work!

T.

Answer 2

Iced coffee may have been better but still a mess!  I assumed you got the ctr/alt/del keys pressed to force reload!  lol I liked the last line as it has double meaning.

Answer 3

Enjoyed the personification of the keyboard, and therefore the computer laughing at you.  Mine argues with me all the time.

Answer 4

magnificent ! bordering on obsession.

certainly relative to mine own morning ritual

Answer 5

"This is exactly how i sit right now. Although I haven't silt the coffee yet, so please don't jinks me. And since my husband fixed my fuss pot computer, It's all good.  

Great Poem  :)

Answer 6

In my opinion...

Pretty good. This line; "Scolding scalding with each touch" could have been a blockbuster. It needs to finish with a reinforcing internal rhyme.

Anything; 'balding' would be good.

Answer 7

With each tap,a letter shows,what the words mean, nobody knows.

I ask myself am I saying the right thing?

Then start my tapping over again.

I try To Tell it the way that it is,but somehow,

get distracted by my own form of practise.

If only,If only,My words could make sense.

One Day they Will,and my Life Will Commence!

Coffee, No I have Tea!