Comment my poem!?

Question

I wrote your name in the dirt,

but it got stomped to dust,

I wrote your name on a piece of paper,

but it just got crumpled up,

I wrote your name in the sand,

but it got washed away,

I wrote your name in my heart,

and forever it will stay,

-WWP

TITLE? COMMENT? OPINION? HELP? CRITISIZE? All appreciated... Thanks a ton!

Answer 1

Titles( Writing your name) or

Your name disappeared.

The above are some suggestion for this poem

I seem to have heard this poem.

It is about all the measure of writing the other

person's name but no matter what way you did it

it would disappear.

The first line

(I wrote your name in the dirt

only for it to be blown by the wind

and in to dust )

Answer 2

Title: Whats stays with me!

Opinion: Beautiful

Answer 3

I've heard something like that before that ended, "I wrote your name on my heart, and forever it will stay".

It's still good though. :-)

Answer 4

Title: Forever It Will Stay, In My Heart, Wrote Your Name

Comment: Great imagery

Opinion: Excellent, well-written, and sincere

Help: I don't know if you want a perfect rhyme, but if you do, find another phrase for "it got crumpled up." I still do appreciate the imperfect rhyme, though!

Criticize: Honestly, none. Except that you spelled criticize wrong. ;D

Hope that helps! You have a lot of talent! :)

Answer 5

I've heard it before. But it started with " i wrote your name on my hand, but it faded away." its sort of the same.

Answer 6

the title should b something lyk "Your name 4ever"....

Answer 7

I think it's beatiful. It's very creative. For a name maybe "I wrote your name." You truley have talent. No criticism