Comment please on my poem?

Question

"By and by i would come"

He promised and i waited

Only to find the moon of longest month

In the morning sky

And a burning tear

{probably in my left eye}

Answer 1

honestly i cant consider that thing as a poem...

in writing a poem you need your heart and soul for you to construct a good and effective poem...

i guess you just wrote an essay... a very short essay...

Answer 2

Absolutely wrenching...love it

Answer 3

very good well done

Answer 4

i dont get it???

Answer 5

It's quite simple and I really like it. Everything is said, the emotion is felt also, in absolutely enough words. A complete poem and there's no need for changes. Nice work dear

And like a reply on that, as I already told you:

..Again today has yesterday’s aroma,

Is it fair to live just to see the end,

It’s hard to watch this world of pale promises,

Writing some letters, never to be sent...

Answer 6

Sad..= (`````

answer mine please?

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Answer 7

It's not great, but it's not good. I'm answering you honestly. I think you can work on it a little more.

Answer 8

Here is an example of

someone who makes a

promise and doesn't

keep it.

That is not a nice way to treat someone

I was talking about the a person got treated

The poem is beautiful.

The treatment is like abuse

and something like this happens

there is  no excuse

because there is betrayal

as a result no trust

This is what I am interpreting.