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Comments on my poem please? It's called 'The Shadow at the Door' xx

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Hhm yeah its about a guy.. lol XD... sorry it goes on a bit

The shadow at the door.

He always leaves me wanting, just a little bit more,

Than the last time he came around.

The blacking of the light, and the thunder out of sight,

Thrill and delight,

Or disappoint.

A glimmer of change and the reversal of roles,

Flashes before me, but never becomes whole.

All too soon it is ruined by my too eager soul.

Another place and another time,

Maybe then, that shadow would be mine.

To cast across his doorway.

Another one, or two, or three,

They seem the same, but there’s something I don’t see,

They cannot cast a shadow on my door.

They do what they can, but there is another I want more.

Try as they might, the light never flickers,

I never look up or wonder.

They can do as they wish, and I shall be ignorant of it all,

For I’ll be there watching, waiting, as the shadow climbs my wall.

The shadow is beautiful to behold,

But there is one thing, that I was never told,

A shadow can’t be touched, or loved, or hugged, or kissed,

It only can be watched, and when it’s gone, be missed.

Observe from a distance and let your rapture unfold,

But get too close and there’s nothing,

Just darkness, harsh and cold.

The shadow knows no keeper, and is fleeting from your door,

He does just exactly what pleases him,

Nothing less and never anything more.

Every card is a joker in his winning hand,

You want to raise the stakes, just to make him understand.

Do what you will, make your all or nothing bet,

The dealer takes one, and her name is regret.

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  1. Don't quit your day job.


  2. nice

  3. i like it, how is mine?

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  4. its a good poem :) i like it.  

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