Comments on this new poem, please?

Question

I'm keeping San Francisco,

the Seahawks jersey,

and the first time you saw me.

I'm keeping the Oakland A's hat.

I'm keeping the thirst, the depth,

and the cold

surface of uncertainty.

I'm keeping the letters I wrote to you.

I'm keeping the shadows we made on the wall.

I'm saving every tear in the ocean.

I'm keeping atheism,

California,

and Wednesdays.

But I'm taking back Lindsay.

Answer 1

Awwwww, great poem.

You know what some of my friends and I did a few days ago to leave behind this really hateful teacher... we took a few of his belonging, got together, and burned them with a blow torch.

It felt great. --- Hope you find something that works for you.

Answer 2

I feel your emotions through this honey ... love you little one... (((((((((Linz))))))))))

Answer 3

when you write, your soul speaks. And when you get it out, your soul heals.

Here's to healing sweetie. (((((((((((((((((((( Linz )))))))))))))))))))))))))

Answer 4

This is a really cool was of saying these things. I like this poem very much.

Answer 5

I hope you meet the coolest person ever and become the happiest Lindsay too.

Answer 6

You go girl... need any help? Definitely one of my better readings tonight. On a scale of 10 beers...you get 9 from me.

Answer 7

What did U mean by KEEPING : sticking to & preserving or leaving and abandoning ?

Your feelings would warm a large chunk of the north pole, so please don't go there, or we all gonna drown.

repetition of "I'm keeping" has weakened the poem. Other than that U R on, U have what it takes, and who knows, someday U 'd be a prominent poet.. I like it, and I enjoyed it.

One question though, and hope its not personal,why R U keeping Wednesday ? Why Wednesday!

EDIT :  Volio conocere perche Wednesday !!!!!!!!!!????????

Answer 8

Cute, but only the insiders that know the story can appreciate it.

Everyone else is lost.

Answer 9

So many of us have left our hearts in San Francisco.

Did that tune just pop into your head too? Lol

"Your laughter, your tears, I'll make them all my souvenirs."

Best wishes

Answer 10

I love it, Linzy!!

Although some of the images are sad, overall the tone is positive and conveys inner strength.

(((Lindsay))))

Answer 11

You might be angry, but you're not a punk.  Great write!

Answer 12

I have no idea what's going on in your life, but I hope you get through this safe, happy and wise.