Commentttttt on this poem i wrote at werk LOL!!!?

Question

moon dances over streelights

we could be somewhere else

past the sky's limit

don't just sit there!

draw a cab dear

i will take you down any street you can imagine

we can ride through hours

unconcerned of destination

we can even stop to stare

or lay out dreams

across the windshield

unfold ourselves on top of them

comforting our spines

talking to the sky

I will be your driver

I will be your guide

through city lights

and winding roads

that press our heads like buttons gleaming

and while our bodies sparkle

bright like boards

we'll take control

atleast of where we go

and when we know

we'll hold the brakes

say goodnight

deascend into our dreams.

Answer 1

Not trying to be a smart ***. But it makes me want to ditch work, go lay out under a tree by the lake while the meteor showers are being displayed and sleep there for a bit. It's very carefree. And do excuse the spelling or punctuation, it's been a while since I've been graded on it. KEEP WRITING. I like writing too. Maybe I'll send you one of my poems.

Answer 2

ITs Realy GOOD! i love it!

Answer 3

" Hi!"

"Pack for two, Take me with you".

Great poem, I liked it.

Cheers : )