Could i have an opinion on this poem i wrote?

Question

So I'm 14.

i wrote this poem.

tell me if you like it or dislike it.

you'll think of me

i promise you that

but **** happens

now go and smoke that tree

yeah thats what you do

when things go wrong

wow that makes you seem strong

all i tried to do was help

but s***w it

you dont even care

nothing in life is ever fair

but you'll still think of me

and i'll still promise you that

but i still wont be here

when you still turn back

now that ive made my promise

im going to follow through

with everything i ever promised

very unlike you

you never did what you said you would

but while you were high im not sure that you could

as i lay here silently

as i begin to weap

every second we had will come back

as i cry myself to sleep.

Answer 1

marvelous. but you still need to work on your poem

keep writing  

Answer 2

needs work but its good

keep writing

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