Could someone critique my poem? about adoption...?

Question

I am the birth farter, and I wish to write a poem to him. I am looking for advice, reactions, and thoughts. thank you.

I do Love You

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A new day is here

A new day has dawn

My heart stops

and yours beats on.

In that instance

I have come to see

you brough new life

to not just me.

But on this day,

I had to make

a most difficult choice

but for your best sake.

Just the thought brings a tear

for you may not be close

but my heart you are near.

Even though our eyes won't match

nor my arms open and catch

you must know

I do love you

and they do too.

Answer 1

I think its a really nice poem, its pretty simple but has alot of meaning.

One thing I can point out as constructive critisism though, is I think at the end of the poem where you have wrote:

"I do love you

and they do too."

I think it would be alot more effective without the "And they do too", since "I do love you" is the title of the poem, and they are the most powerful words in there, thus not needing a rhyme for effect.

Just my opinion though, its great either way.

//Kitty